I think the thing in paragraph 5 may have been that he was restructuring sentences at the same time. "the ones who can care for the kids while mom is away on a business trip. The men who can tuck the kids in at night. The men who mom can leave at home and rest assured that she will not return to a burnt down house." this is four sentence fragments in a row. If you correct it liket this: "these are the ones who can care for the kids while mom is away on a business trip, the men who can tuck the kids in at night, and the men who mom can leave at home and rest assured that she will not return to a burnt down house." it adds 3 commas.
Anytime you have two complete sentences strung together by "and," "or," or "but" you have to use a comma:
"men take one folder out at a time, while women are multitaskers, and they can look at many folders while driving and drinking their coffee." .N.O.T:
"men take one folder out at a time, while women are multitaskers and they can look at many folders while driving and drinking their coffee."
also, anytime you have a list of things like "get the kids up, fed, dressed, and on the bus on time" you need a comma before the "and" or "or." several of your errors were forgotten commas like that.
If men were more like women
men and women’s minds are like filing cabinets. Men take one folder out at a time, while women are multitaskers
need comma here and they can look at many folders while driving and drinking their coffee. Women are expected to keep the house clean, raise the kids, and have a hot supper waiting every night for when her husband comes home. What men fail to remember is that while they were at work, their wife was at work also. She worked from nine to five then performed all the duties mentioned above, but if something is not done right
need comma here men tend to fly off the handle and get angry.
A mom can get the kids up, fed, dressed
need comma here and on the bus on time while putting on her make-up, letting the dog out, finding her husband's car keys, putting a roast in the slow-cooker
need comma here and kissing everyone goodbye. Meanwhile, most men miss the train coming at them down the track because they are so focused on tuning in the radio station.
Pregnant women also get treated badly because the men do not understand what it is like to be pregnant. This woman walks around all day with a huge stomach and a child moving in there
need comma here and yet, when all she wants to do is sit down at night, she gets accused of being “lazy” and “not giving her husband the attention he deserves.” the problem is that men do not understand the first thing about pregnancy beyond the point of conception.
A man would be better off if he had a woman's patience. With her patience a woman can referee the kids' fighting in the back seat, keep the baby from crying through the whole drive, and make a game out of "how many times have we passed this corner
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need comma here he could play golf without throwing his clubs in a pond and change a spare tire without kicking the jack.
Not all men are rude, selfish people. There are a few who buck the trend and tend to be the “mr. Mom’s” that we all wish we could have. Most men have the ability to be kinder and more gentle
need comma here but they have egos the size of texas
need comma here and therefore, they cannot lose their “macho” style. These are the men that women dream of. The ones who can care for the kids while mom is away on a business trip. The men who can tuck the kids in at night. The men who mom can leave at home and rest assured that she will not return to a burnt down house. There are some, but they are few and far between.
Whoever said men and women were equal must have been blind. If men would just grow their hair long, pluck their eyebrows, wear dresses, and lose the testicals, they would still be men. But if they began to think in more than one direction at a time and were patient while doing so, they would move a step up the progression ladder. If men would acquire some of the “women’s” views, the world would be a lot easier and men would have a lot more fun living in it.
