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shortgeek

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Posted: 08-19-07 10:28am

I just wrote this poem for a small ttc poem contest. I've never been good at writing poems, especially if I was trying to capture an emotion. Here I'm trying for perseverence but it also feels a little sad. What do you think?

Hush little eggies, don’t you cry
Momma’s got a plan to multiply
Success is only a small chance
So momma’s gonna do a baby dance
And if that baby dance don’t succeed
Momma’s gonna spread some preseed
And if that preceed’s just a dream
Momma’s gonna take some clomiphene
And if the clomiphene stymies
Momma’s gonna get an HSG
And if it shows my tubes are a mess
Momma can still use IVF
So hush little eggies, don’t you cry
Momma’s gonna give it another try
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monkeygirl22

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Posted: 08-19-07 10:41am

Oh that is so cute Shorty! I think you should definitely enter that.
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Jules

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Posted: 08-19-07 11:52am

Oh that's lovely! Really nicely done!

What's preseed - like precum? What do you mean by spreading it? Sorry, think I might be missing summat here Laughing
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Posted: 08-19-07 12:21pm

Preseed is a special lubricant to use when ttc. It promotes a healthy environment for sperm where as store brand lubricants can hinder the sperm from getting where they need to be.
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fairytale007

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Posted: 08-19-07 23:24pm

That's such a sweet poem! I hope you enter it and win! Smile Good luck.
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Jules

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Posted: 08-20-07 00:50am

monkeygirl22 wrote:
Preseed is a special lubricant to use when ttc. It promotes a healthy environment for sperm where as store brand lubricants can hinder the sperm from getting where they need to be.


Ah, yeah that makes more sense than the mental image I had of you smearing pre-cum everywhere! Laughing

I hope you win - I think the poem is brilliant Wink
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HcoBrunette06

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Posted: 08-20-07 01:03am

i love it because it came from your heart and that's all that matters Smile i think its neat.
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shortgeek

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Posted: 08-20-07 18:18pm

Thank you. I did change one line: I replaced "And if clomiphene stymies" with "And if af still visits me." It sounds simpler.
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CaNdItAs CrAzY LaNd

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Posted: 08-20-07 20:55pm

llllooovvveeee iiittttt love it love it Very
Happy
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